Wow! Both of you with powerful pieces.... @ J Kayla...wow...I can so deeply relate to some parts...words that I never bothered to try to put down came to me as I read your emotions. Excellent to read you both.
Intensely emotional. Beautifully read. Two different kinds of heartbreak; the
one global, the other deeply personal.
You sustain the metaphor of emotional baggage throughout the second poem and have some lines that resonate with me, like 'it wasn’t warmth I felt, but the weight of compliance'. Skilful use of alliteration, too.
J, my crestfallen compadre, your piece is a quiet heartbreak. It brings back memories of my own past relationships, when I could only watch as they sadly and slowly fizzled out. Your reading adds a personal touch that only you could create. I am honoured to be by your side in this.
Its crazy to make metaphors that create a logical connection so well. These were both fantastic
Thank you, dear E! ❤️
Thank you E.R.!!
Haunting and beautiful. Both. 🖤
Thank you Marcia! ❤️
Both of these poems powerful and effective! Beautiful, amazing writing.
Thank you Jill!
Thank you Queen Jill! ❤️
I How fickle and futile,
this future seems indeed!
We'll give it our best shot though :D
Wow! Both of you with powerful pieces.... @ J Kayla...wow...I can so deeply relate to some parts...words that I never bothered to try to put down came to me as I read your emotions. Excellent to read you both.
Thank you Sylvia!!
Do I want to be in a party bathroom or at a train station?
Both. But more than that I want to be right here. Going in for re-reads.
The party bathroom AT the train station is the place to be.
Thank you, Deb! ❤️
Yes both can be true!
Stunning.
Intensely emotional. Beautifully read. Two different kinds of heartbreak; the
one global, the other deeply personal.
You sustain the metaphor of emotional baggage throughout the second poem and have some lines that resonate with me, like 'it wasn’t warmth I felt, but the weight of compliance'. Skilful use of alliteration, too.
Thanking yous, Tony ❤️
Thank you Tony!
J, my crestfallen compadre, your piece is a quiet heartbreak. It brings back memories of my own past relationships, when I could only watch as they sadly and slowly fizzled out. Your reading adds a personal touch that only you could create. I am honoured to be by your side in this.
It's me that is honored
The dynamic duo!